Yes, please. So many times I want to show something to someone for critique, but fear they'll just say it looks good.

This please. The head doesn't look right and I'm not pleased with the inner back leg. The spiky things on the back of the head are supposed to be feathers... hmm.

Ugh, I neeeed help with deer XDD I'm still learning how to draw them- I find particularly their backlegs hard..
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(these two kind of have the same deer pose, so I figured why not post them both. But you can just do one, of course! ^^)

And sure, why not humans XDD I'm improving in them, but their profiles are hard D:
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XD Hopefully the links will work! I liked them to my DeviantART account..
Thanks for doing this Tera!!! ♥

If you'd like to, Tera.

Sianna:

Here is the redline for your pose. I'll likely be deleting that from my photobucket later so save it if you want to reference from it later.

What I did to change the legs was draw a perspective rectangle based on where the front legs of your deer were already placed. If your deer was standing with all four legs flat on the ground, each hoof would be at one of the four points of the rectangle. The leg you mentioned was too far forward, but you did a good job placing it directly under the body, all I did was scoot it back a few inches. I also bumped the other hind leg out to line up with the perspective rectangle. This is a less important change and can be omitted/decreased if you prefer, to me this leg position just looks more balanced. It isn't vital that each hoof line up with the rectangle but it can help if you run into trouble.

As for the feathers, I think they are fine for now. The perspective on them is ok (feathers tend to be more fluid than say, antlers. Since they move around, it is natural for them to not line up with the head perfectly). When you continue the piece, just put a bit of effort into rendering the feathers as light and airy. Look at reference, and maybe try drawing them semi-transparent will help.

I should also mention you did a very nice job fleshing out the main body of the deer, it looks solid, round, and the legs show that there is actual weight there. It's hard to render gravity but you certainly have a good start!

Edit: Bayleen I sent you your critique in a DA note, since it was so long >_< lol. I hope it helps!

You are most welcome Sianna, I get a lot out of analyzing others works so it's helpful for me as well. I'm glad the things I pointed out are relevant to you.

No problem Ocean, I'll give those a read now and then formulate some feedback after supper.

I'd be happy to look at these for you Wetterhound and the widescreen monitor isn't a problem, I've got one lol. It would help me though if you'd share anything in particular you are looking to improve on. Do you want me to critique the plot entries on their own, as a whole, or critique the plot (as it stands) itself?

I'm reading them right now!
I'll just leave some comments on them with my general thoughts/feedback then. No need to spoil the plot for me though, I wanna read the others when you're done them!

Aw, thank you Eyestrain, that's lovely to read. c:

I hate to ask, but could you critique my Sword of the Samurai story? I'm afraid that there isn't enough during the 'month-long' period, as in I need to add more of what happens between his arrival and his departure from the monastery.

Also I'm afraid that this story isn't realistic or practical, and continue to ask myself the following questions:

"Why would the monks even have a samurai sword in their possession?"
"Why is this particular sword so valuable that one must climb to the top of a mountain for it?"
"Why would the monks give the sword away if they practice non-violence?"

Thanks for your time.