Trying my hand at poems.

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omg, I'm really not good at these, but I wanted to post what I did up. If only for me, because maybe I'll stick them on bios or something. If you'd like a poem, Quad is/was offering some here. He's got amazing talent! I'm just doing some to brainstorm and possibly little gifts for friends.
I feel like my brain explodes doing poems.. haha

Feedback's encouraged.

Hoshiko #1
Little star, little star
Do you know how loved you are?
Dancing above in the sky
Like an angel upon high
Coming down to Earth to see
Only staying briefly
Whispy as a breath of air
Often no one sees you there
Little star, little star
Do you know how loved you are?



Hoshiko#2
A fawn
Marked like the stars
Light as the mist
Dances with the moon
On a starlit night
She touches the Earth
Only a silhouette formed
But loved more than life itself
A union of dark and light
She was a gift of love
Who faded too soon.
As soon as she comes she is gone
As quick as the shooting stars
She races across the evening sky

Wow, these are both really

Wow, these are both really good. <3
I adore that first one.
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Kaoori's picture

really? Thanks. I was nervous

really? Thanks. I was nervous about posting them... writing really isn't my thing.
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I really like these. The

I really like these. The first one flows and rhymes really well especially, and I think they both represent Hoshiko well.
Kaoori's picture

Thanks Quad. Means a lot

Thanks Quad. Means a lot coming from you. <3

These are sweet, the first

These are sweet, the first one especially I like.

The first is beautiful

The first is beautiful ♥ The second equally so. You ought to write more of these.
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fff thank you. I honestly

fff thank you. I honestly didn't expect comments on these.. but maybe I'll try a couple more ^^
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Do.

Do.

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