January 2, 2011 - 12:38am — CalmlyBree
I see the tree's,
I see the fire,
I see them clash.
The light reflects onto the moon.
Big, blue, bright, known to be cheese moon.
This then reflects on the sun,
The sun shines, brighter than before;
Except only the sharpest eyes can see.
Then the sun will be so hot as always in mid day.
Cause a fire and then...
I see the tree's,
I see the fire,
I see them clash.
I love the repetition there.
Keep on it
Still love your writings
Especially this one, I really like how you've made it all make sense at the end, like it just suddenly clicked. That doesn't make sense at all LOL, I can't explain what I mean, and this made sense in the first place, but I understood what the fire had to do with it all and it put a nice ending to it. -still making no sense-
I also love how you've finished it off with what you said at the beginning too.