[ extracts : 4 ] mature warning

swearing. mature. sexual implications.

"Don't touch him! Don't you dare fuckin' touch him! I'll kill you! I'll kill you!"
"What was that, Number Nine? Did you say something?"
"Let him go, he didn't do nothin' wrong! You damn well know he didn't do nothin' wrong!"
"If he didn't disobey my orders, then who did, Number Nine? Either way, someone is going to be punished for it. Do you want it to be you?"
"No, but--"
"Then I suggest you keep that pretty mouth of yours closed."
"Sax, don't let him! I didn't do it! I didn't fuckin' do it--fuck, stop!"
"We've barely begun, Agent Five. Are you pleading already?"
"Stop it! Fuckin' stop it, he didn't do it! You know he didn't do it!"
"And yet I don't see anyone else taking responsibility...do you?"
"Shit! Please, please--Sax, make it stop, make him--make him stop--hrghk!"
"Snake! Snake! Danforth--Danforth leave him, leave him alone! You bastard, he didn't do anythin'! Coward!"
"Sax--tell them, tell him--tell him--please--tell the truth!"
"The truth, hm? Oh, Agent Five...why would she do such a thing, when she can lie and remain unpunished?"
"She--"
"--she what? Cares for you? Really, now? Is that why she's letting me do--hn--this?"
"I'LL MURDER YOU!"
"Ah, Number Nine. As long as I do not touch you, you will do nothing."
"...Sax, please...please..."
"Well? Do you want to help your comrade?"
"Of course I fuckin' do, jackass, let 'im go!"
"Give me reason to, then. Enlighten me as to what really happened, or your friend--oh, dear."
"...Snake? Snake? Answer me, you cunt! Don't--Snake--! Wake him up! God damn it, Danforth, wake him up!"
"I'm afraid I cannot, agent."
"You can! Yes you can! Do it, wake him up, he's--he's bleeding, he--"
"Shame. You could have saved him, too...But you were always a selfish little girl, weren't you? ...What's that, no answer, Number Nine? Could it be that you're admitting defeat?"
"This ain't defeat, scumbag. You don't know what it means to fuckin' defeat someone. Yer pathe--ow! Fuck!"
"Was that a cry of pain, Saxophone?"
"Don't call me tha--shit!"
"I'm disappointed. Agent Five seems to believe you enjoy pain...or is he misinformed?"
"Go to Hell!"
"Ah, Agent...people like us, they always do. I suppose I shall see you there, in the end. After all, all monsters eventually end up in Hell..."
"You might be a--ow, fuck--monster but I--hrghk!--I ain't!"
"What makes me a monster, Number Nine?"
"You--you--stop it, let me fuckin' sp-speak if you--!"
"You cannot talk past a tiny bit of pain?"
"You--use people, you black--mail them--fuck--you hurt people--yer--yer a cruel, sadistic--piece of sh--"
"--my, my. One might think you were describing yourself there, agent."
"I'm nothin' like y--get yer hands offa me! Don't touch me, don't you dare fuckin' touch me!"
"My hand is merely resting on your neck, agent. A gesture of comfort."
"I don't want yer comfort! Don't touch me! I know--I know what you did to--!"
"--to who, agent? What did I do? Choose your words carefully, Number Nine. They may very well be your last."
"...g-get yer hands off my neck."
"Good girl. Now, I suggest that once he awakens, you and your comrade visit the priest. Perhaps God will save you both."
"Don't need no savin', jackass, see you in He--"
"--address me properly or you will not leave this room with your sanity, nor your innocence. I can show you things you'd never dare to dream, Number Nine...no? Fine. Have it your way. Get out of my sight."
"B-bastard..."
"What was that?"
"...I said 'sir', o'course."
"Good girl. Now take him, and leave."
"Right...sir."

Snowsauria's picture

So awesome. ^^ Sax is a tough

So awesome. ^^
Sax is a tough girl. ._.

asdsdf thankyou 8'D She likes

asdsdf thankyou 8'D She likes to think so, too.
RainbowSnoopy's picture

This is amazing! : D *waits

This is amazing! : D *waits patiently for more* C:

Poor Snake D:
Kumiko's picture

I got mad reading that. D=

I got mad reading that. D=

Rainbow; asdsf thankyou ;u;

Rainbow; asdsf thankyou ;u; ♥ I love writing in this sort of style, where the actions have to be made obvious through speech whilst still remaining ambiguous...Snake takes a lot of crap from the Commander, sadly ;;

Kumiko; Good! |: I can't decide whether to be angrier at Danforth or Sax, though.
ocean's picture

Ffff I'm not really sure why

Ffff I'm not really sure why I chose not to comment. |: LET ME REMEDY THIS

Ohgod Crucible names. ;u; MAKES ME SO HAPPY Danforth is awesome

Also. I've always wanted to experiment with dialogue-only stories, if just to improve my failure in dialogue. ene

I really enjoyed this, though, it was well-written. Your dialogue is fantabulous. B|

DSFSD OCEAN ♥ MAN I

DSFSD OCEAN ♥ MAN I feel sort of bad for calling him Danforth because I love the name and I had no idea at the time what a jackass he was going to turn out to beee.

I find dialogue-only is really, really fun to write. It saves so much frustration having to write out what's happening in well, story-mode. It's also interesting to experiment with different words and ways of saying things to make it clear how characters feel, and what's going on, etc. I pay too much attention to what words I use and whether there are more fitting synonyms >>;

Thaaaankyou ;; I hope so, man, I want to write like this again sdfksdfjh.