January 27, 2009 - 3:07am — lordslttldeer
Since I know that I won't get much notice from most people on here, I decided to post one of my poems. I really don't mind if anyone doesn't read this as I am posting it for my own pleasure. Besides it is always a nice little surprise when someone leaves a comment.
“My Savior”
During the days of my darkness
You were there, hidden just beyond my reach.
I cried out in pain
And I felt as if I had to fight alone.
You were there, watching with tears in Your eyes.
I turned inward, grieving.
You were there, waiting to hear me call Your name.
You guided me even when I was blinded to You.
You opened doors and yet I never paid You any attention.
I kept falling but You kept me from the abyss.
When You reached through to me
It was like a flame guiding me to Your path.
You laid out everything good in my life
Even when all I saw was the bad.
You gave me so many chances to turn to You.
When I returned home to You
You poured Your Spirit into my heart.
You broke down the barriers of my soul
And severed the agreements I made with the enemy.
You lifted me high so that I could see all that You had done.
You gave me a glimpse of heaven so that I may know Your greatness.
You told me that You chose me so that I may know acceptance.
You love me before anyone else
And showed me what true patience is.
I look into Your eyes and I see such wisdom.
Your beauty is amazing.
To read Your Word humbles my soul to
Know the many ways You are willing to forgive me.
You warn me of the consequences of sin
And You are always leading me closer to You.
I give my life to You, my Savior.
Pretty.
^^ Thank you.
Hmmm...As a serious
I think, though, that it's a sweet little poem.
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Nelle Rovine
Thank you very much. I never
It's my pleasure. I enjoy
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Nelle Rovine
I think it's beautiful, and
I have never been much a fan of freeform poetry, though. :[ I like rhythm, or some sort of alliteration or key word. *shrugs* This is still pretty awesome and I love the words you chose. It'd make a great song.
I really like this poem, the
Although it can be disturbing at some points too, maybe you used it a little TOO much. But only a little!
Furthermore... I like the use of different stanzas. You know, like this:
Blaaaaaaablablaaa
blaaaaaablablablabla
blablablablablablaaaa
Blaaadieblaadieblaaa
Blaaadieblaadieblaaa
Etc.
You get me? I'm pretty bad at explaining so... ^^;
To pray is to believe, to believe is to purify one's soul
To pray is to believe, to believe is to purify one's soul
I thank all of you for your