Nightingales Calling

I sit and listen the nightingales calling, my heart leaping with every dawning.
My body a tingle with every falling, to sing in the dark of every porling.
In the dark of night awake, the dancing souls in the heavens bait,
And I feel alive in memories wake, to live and love another mate.

In the silence that falls a sunder, falling like a roar of thunder,
I listen to the others calling, like a birch tree sudden falling.
Calling me to join the dance, in a line of perfect prance,
In the silence dim, like a minstrels waking dawn,
I sit and listen to the nightingales calling,
Calling for the faithful souls a home.

Well that sucked, but for a first try, it ain't too bad. Not too bad at all. Oh well. I guess you could say that I ain't that good at poetry. And in truth, I stink.
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No not so Calmarinian. You

No not so Calmarinian. You have some metaphors that breathe life. the dark of every porling, dancing souls, a line of perfect prance, ministrels waking dawn---all paint an image in our mind. You never get to write something just once-words are precious and have to be tweaked especially in poetry. It has a rhythm and flow in it. Find the spots who's rhythm and flow do not match and tweak them. Send to a poetry contest. You have gift for phrasing. Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

^ So true. You have a gift. I

^ So true. You have a gift. I could literally see the poem in my mind. 5/5 from me! ^^