This is actually quite cleverly and interestingly written! 8D Well done!!!!

I see you haven't given up on your writing

Well that's your choice to burden this communty with this vile,repulsive shit.

I will Sluggs and thank you.

wow.... Asome as always. I love your discriptions how the phrases lead to the next part. it's the truth plain and simple. Keep it going I hope to be around to see more of your work soon. 10/10A+++++

The best thing about writing is the freedom to write about ANYTHING, even things you don't support personally. So it's perfectly fine to write about alcohol and smoking, it doesn't immediately make us think bad about you. Besides, what you've written about is a part of life. I like seeing that in a poem, as it makes the reader easy to identify with the written piece.

The poem is drenched with her emotions (I assume she's a girl), anger, revenge but also sorrow. She wants the one who hurt her to feel the same pain, am I right? It's not clouded in a mystery of metaphores, which is something I appreciate. Don't get me wrong, I like the more 'poetic' style too, but I can only support modern writing like this!

It's very good, keep on writing faunet!

Oh and Faunee, if you don't have any reasonable arguments to why you don't like this writing, I suggest you just keep your mouth shut. It's fine if you don't like someone's work, but I got the impression you were out to offend faunet personally, instead of focusing on the poem. Please think before you spam someone's page with 'barf' smilies.