Ignore this soul
For I may forever more
Be bound by the chains of hell
From which there is no escape
Even though this air is pure
That which I breath
Bodily bound am I
To them as a servent
However one thing they shall never chain or cage
Is my spirit and my heart.
Let us cherish and love what we have today
For we do not know when it will be taken from our grasp
Simple memories will become a treasured moment in time
The chance to hug your loved and tell them I love you might one day vanish without a trace.
The material things in this world will eventually corrode and rot away,
But the memories and time we share are so prescious
They can only be treasured
Locked away inside our hearts.
Why must we turn our backs on one another
To lie,to hurt one another to get what we want in this life
Is their reallly anything so important you would destroy someones life or dreams just to snatch your own?
It seems that this is the way the world works nowadays
But if you ask me it is not right
Why would any one be so lowly as to do these things
To me this is the greatest question.
Not what is our purpose here on earth
No,we find our purpose through the paths we take in life
But why do some let greed overcome them?
That to me is a greater question.
Allrighty then!
First poem; I love this one. The line 'Bodily bound am I' made me shiver for no apparent reason, and I can honestly say you are a fantastic writer. You have a lot of potential.
Second poem; It's short, but I like it that way C: Reminds me of a haiku in that sense, and it's very simple yet complex in meaning. -no idea-
Third poem; I'm guessing this is a poem that portrays your emotions about a particular tragedy in your life, but I could be wrong. It's beautiful, and I agree with every word. <3
Fourth poem; I agree with everything, and I love you so much for writing this. The world disgusts me often, and you've put many of my feelings towards it into words. Amazing, like the others.
There's my opinions ^^; Probably the most I've ever written about anyone's writings xD <333
Let us charge into this world with out hesitation.
With confidence and our friends by our side
Keep our fears close and learn to conquer them
Well find our stength from the ones we love
Chasing what we want in life
Having no regrets
Charging forward with a smile on our face
And in our hearts.
We will learn to live
Our own lives.
Ignore this soul For I may
For I may forever more
Be bound by the chains of hell
From which there is no escape
Even though this air is pure
That which I breath
Bodily bound am I
To them as a servent
However one thing they shall never chain or cage
Is my spirit and my heart.
This hope I have Is a never
Is a never ending stream
Cheered on by the little brookes
I recieve my stength
So that I might one day offer my assistance sea.
Let us cherish and love what
For we do not know when it will be taken from our grasp
Simple memories will become a treasured moment in time
The chance to hug your loved and tell them I love you might one day vanish without a trace.
The material things in this world will eventually corrode and rot away,
But the memories and time we share are so prescious
They can only be treasured
Locked away inside our hearts.
Why must we turn our backs on
To lie,to hurt one another to get what we want in this life
Is their reallly anything so important you would destroy someones life or dreams just to snatch your own?
It seems that this is the way the world works nowadays
But if you ask me it is not right
Why would any one be so lowly as to do these things
To me this is the greatest question.
Not what is our purpose here on earth
No,we find our purpose through the paths we take in life
But why do some let greed overcome them?
That to me is a greater question.
Ok I think Im done ,but
Feel free to give constructive criticism.
*nodnodnod* these are
Aww thanks quadraptor.
I'm nowhere near able to
:)
Allrighty then! First poem;
First poem; I love this one. The line 'Bodily bound am I' made me shiver for no apparent reason, and I can honestly say you are a fantastic writer. You have a lot of potential.
Second poem; It's short, but I like it that way C: Reminds me of a haiku in that sense, and it's very simple yet complex in meaning. -no idea-
Third poem; I'm guessing this is a poem that portrays your emotions about a particular tragedy in your life, but I could be wrong. It's beautiful, and I agree with every word. <3
Fourth poem; I agree with everything, and I love you so much for writing this. The world disgusts me often, and you've put many of my feelings towards it into words. Amazing, like the others.
There's my opinions ^^; Probably the most I've ever written about anyone's writings xD <333
*blushes* Dannii thankyou.
Allof your comments are encouraging me to continue writing.
Good.
i get you wondering if there
Writers do not get enough love
*Love*
A contribution
Love is ausomeness thanks.
I am willing to bet that I
do you now. LOVE beat
LOVE
beat that
Uh oh love war
Let us charge into this world
With confidence and our friends by our side
Keep our fears close and learn to conquer them
Well find our stength from the ones we love
Chasing what we want in life
Having no regrets
Charging forward with a smile on our face
And in our hearts.
We will learn to live
Our own lives.
Let us fly each day into the
Never knowing where we might go
People might think us crazy its true
But as we pass them by they will always see a smile on our face
Never to be shackled but to live blissfully free
Fly in the sky as free as can be with the birds
Letting our spirits soar high above the clouds never to fall or crash into the earth below.