Fighting For Live - Part 1
The windy clouds was so havy in the sky that it almost started to rain.
Every one alraidy had a plase to sit in when it started to rain.
Exept for one.
A little fawn!
He loked for a plase to sit while the rain.
But wher ever he wanted to sit, the deer's who was alraidy siting ther didn't let him to come ther!
He had not eny choise then to sit in the wet flowers.
He thot how good it was when his mom was with him!
But then he got sad.
He remember how she was kild by the wolf.
And he hated them for that!
It's alraidy 3 days ago the little fawn sow his mom!
His sister was maried and had one baby and she culd not take care of two fawns at the same time!
He never was so alone.
And then he shouted.
- I HATE YOU WHO KILD MY MOM!!!!
Then it was quaite for a while...
He was angry like a beast!
After a hard day, finely he fell aslep.
It was hapening wery scary things in his minde...
He sow the wolf and his mom fighting for her live!
Just after a moment he waked up with a skream!
He loked around but no one was ther!
So he desided to take a bath at the pond just when he heard a sound.
It was coming from the pond.
He ran closer to lok what it was.
When he came ther, he sow many deer's standing in a circle!
- What happend here?
- A deer was kiled by the wolf!!
- WHAT!!!!
He pushed away all the deer's who was standing ther and...
He didn't belive his eyes!
It was his sister!
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~Note~
Sory for my bad English!
its great! if you want here
if you want here is some help corrections you don't have to change them though. and tips with remembering
havy= heavy
alraidy= already
plase= place
Exept=Except
loked= looked
wher= where (remember there are some quiet letters on the end of some words. 'defently words with 'r' at the end')
siting=sitting
ther= there
eny= any (I know it doesn't seem right but it is
choise= choice
thot=thought
kild= killed
maried=married (remember on some words there is a doubled letter even though it is silent.)
culd= could
quaite= quiet (I know this one word is very hard for me too. i always go to spell check for it.)
aslep= asleep (remember the two ee's. if you are worryed and don't have a spell check at hand remember in most words like 'woods' or 'book' or even 'sheep' you can hear the carryed sound of the e and the o.)
hapening=happening
wery= very
minde=mind (I know that it sounds like it has a 'e' but it doesn't have one.)
skream= scream (think of ice cream with a s in the beginning this should help!)
desided=decided(remember that some letters like 's' and 'c' sould the same and some words can try and trick you so be careful)
belive=believe (think of this 'bell' met 'i' and dropped a 'l' and 'eve' came over and laughed)
But i loved the story, scary though.
hope this helps!
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thank you! will try to
will try to remember! ^^;