The Deer Who Yearned To Be a Bird - Part Three

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Chapter Three – Twins

The little fawn began to notice the decay around the early evening when he woke. He studied a cloud of flies quite intently as they buzzed and flew over his mother. He didn’t bother to stop them, they were simply too fascinating to resist. Besides, it’s wasn’t like his mother didn’t mind their company.

After a few hours of staring at the dense black cloud of tiny scavengers, the small fawn heard the raspy call of a crow only inches behind him. He screamed in surprise and looped around face to face with not one, but two crows perched on separate branches. One had white wing tips, an oddity among the species, but the other had an even stranger likeness, a white beak.

“Assa! By, this little fyeul is hangin’ around the hause with this ol’ dead hinny, eh Debit?” The white-beaked one said. He was speaking in such an old form of language that the fawn didn’t even to begin to comprehend it. He merely took it as disorganized jibberish. The crow with the white-tipped wings pecked his companion and chided, “Ah, haddaway Credit! Be nice to the young hinny. He don’t look much canny by the looks of him.”

Perhaps we should detour away from our story to briefly talk of these two. Debit and Credit were born in a nest not far from the old oak. They were the last surviving nest mates and unlike other crows who simply went their solitary ways. When they flew off they decided to become companions and travel about together. Their story is rather dull, yes? So with that let’s continue with our orphan fawn.

“Ah, bluidy el’ Debit, Les joost geet on, ya?” the brash Credit sighed. “Hoo ‘bout w’ take the hinny with us?” Debit asked his brother, a sudden gleam in his eye. “The poor little bastard… it’s almost neet. Let’s take him, Credit.” Debit flew down from his branch and perched himself on one of the fawn’s little nubs of antler. Credit said nothing more but swooped down to follow and grabbed the fawn’s ear with his talon’s tightly. Not too tightly to hurt though.

“Coom on ye fyeul, git a move on.” Credit pulled on the fawn’s ear and led him slowly away from the body that was once his mother. “That’s reet, ye turkey, coom on.” Debit pecked the fawn’s head.

Turkey.

It was what the crows were to call him for years to come.

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Ah yes, now we are introduced to the crows Debit and Credit. I hope their introduction hasn't caused to the story to lose much of it's charm (if it had any). Their accents are actually based on a dialect called Upper Tyneside. If anyone has read The Plague Dogs, this is said accent. It's been extremely watered down to not only make it easier for others to understand, but for me to write ^^;. If anyone needs an explanation as to their dialouge, please don't be embarassed, it can take some getting used to.

Pegasicorn's picture

This has plenty of charm to

This has plenty of charm to me. =D I'm eager to read more.

More, please!

More, please! <3
GingerNut's picture

Thank you all so much. I've

Thank you all so much. I've never really been motivated enough at other communities I've been to, but now I'm determined to finish this thing. I don't even know where it will go from here, but it will get finished, I promise you :3

again amazing =D (and nearly

again amazing =D (and nearly missed it because of all the drramalama going on -.- a shame that crab like this bumps beautiful writing like this down /minirant)

please pleae keep ths up <3 and.. mhm... maybe you can do something like a chapterlist we can track so we don't miss anything anymore <3 (just a suggestion of course xD)
Spyrre's picture

Actually I like a lot of the

Actually I like a lot of the new characters, you don´t have to be worried that they would ruin something. This is a wonderful story so far, I´m looking forward to the next chapter. =)
Sorry that I have nothing smart to say, not much of a writer myself.
Seele's picture

I love these writings!

I love these writings! Absolutely adorable story <3 Pff their accents are so cool XDD
GingerNut's picture

Uhm... Alice, how do I do

Uhm... Alice, how do I do that? Laughing out loud *SHOT*
Sorry... a bit noobish I know ^^;;

Oh that is simple =D just

Oh that is simple =D

just make a new blog and post links to the chapters on them

a link can be poste tlike this: http://www.endlessforest.org/community/deer-who-yearned-be-bird-part-three

...this is just the simple link taken from the addressbar of the browser...

or like this:

[*url=http://www.endlessforest.org/community/deer-who-yearned-be-bird-part-three] name of the link [*/url]

ithout the * it looks like this: name of the link ~ this is the prettier way Laughing out loud

hope that helps |D

GingerNut's picture

Oh, thank you ^^;; I never

Oh, thank you ^^;; I never really caught the hang of HTML...