May 15, 2012 - 8:57pm — Poppyflower
My brother.
My sister.
We loved to sing. And we loved music.
From the moment we were born, we wanted to explore and play.
One day, we swore, that our small hooves would one day grow big and strong enough to walk the entire forest.
My brother. Bright as the light of the moon , with a black star on his forehead. Like a morning star.
My sister. Beautiful, black as night. As midnight.
Morning star. Midnight.
When we sang, did they hear us? The other fawns, the does, and the stags?
I think they did. But did we sing very well?
They seemed a bit scared of us.
They would always turn away, run away. Why did they look at us like that?
Mama, it`s making us sad. Though they`re only playing, right?
Daddy, why did you become so angry?
Why did you yell at the others? We didn`t understand. Not really.
So we kept singing.
Until the day the sun stopped moving in the sky.
Until the day they needed us again.
The past was the past, and it doesn`t matter to us. We are the midnight and the morning star, and we understood what that meant now. What we had to do.
We won`t forgot you, Mama, Daddy. We saw the tears in your eyes, and we`re sorry for that.
Thank you for trying to protect us. Thank you for loving us.
So we became the stars.
Do you see us sometimes? We like dancing through the stars.
Shush...
If you listen very closely, you might hear us singing.
"Mama, what are those, up there?"
"Those are stars, my sweets. They help the moon light up the night, so that the moon doesn`t feel so lonely."
"They`re so bright, Mama...."
The doe smiled.
"Perhaps, one day, you will shine brighter than the stars, my children."
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So that`s it. Also, the last part with the dialouge takes place in the past.
Hope you like it, Orinoco! (I`m not sure if it`s my best. Lol)
OMG I love this alot alot
alot alot -glomp hug- :3
You do such great stuff!!!
~ C.S. Lewis
Your welcome! Anytime (
( Is still somewhat shocked to find out that your ten years older than me )
Btw, your stories are good too
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lol well I thought you were
you are very mature and your writing is very good!!
and thanks ^_^though I need to learn more about writing.
~ C.S. Lewis
YESES. I IS VERY MATURE.
Lol, just kidding. Actually, I'm aiming to get a career in writing (either that or somewhere in the wildlife field) when I finish high school.
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Why not both XD I think
I think you'll do great in either though :3
~ C.S. Lewis
Aww, thanks and maybe, lol.
I`m sure your career with comics will turn out great as well. Your drawings are very good. I like drawing too, but just for fun
Btw, I might be in the forest soon.
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OH ok I will meet you
~ C.S. Lewis
"Shush... If you listen
If you listen very closely, you might hear us singing."
That part got me. ;_; Another great job. *sniffle*
Aww thanks The most
The most emotional part for me would probably be the end, with the dialouge. Since the mother doesn't actuallu know her fawns will be apart of the stars one day.
Though who am I to say? I sat through Titanic without sheding a tear, I never cry reading books and watching TV.
Gah, meh no have no soul
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