September 2, 2010 - 9:25am — eyestrain
1. In the beginning, there was nothing but a stag, dreaming of a river.
2. Beside that river grew a red flower. The flower dropped seeds and a great ocean of poppies flooded the riverbanks.
3. The heavy pollen from the flowers woke the stag from his slumber. When he awoke, he stood in dark space, empty and blacker than a crow's feathers.
4. When the stag bellowed, the sound ripped a hole in the blackness and he stepped through the tear into his dream.
5. At the top of a mountain, his step knocked loose a boulder which rolled over the river, and, sent flying, landed with a crash that cracked it in half.
6. The flowers ate the stone, and the stone looked like four hands offering up the world.
7. The stag ate the flowers and the black centers of the poppies looked like a crow's feathers.
8. The crows ate the stag.
9. The stag looked like a forest made of ivory branches.
10. By the river, there were nothing but poppies and two stones with four hands offering up the world to a forest made of ivory branches, dreaming of a stag.
I have been reading Zachary Schomburg's "The Man Suit" and wanted to try using a numbered list, as well
I totally love this, the
Also... what was your deer's name again? >.< Just need to know for the index page, but I looked all over and couldn't find it.
It's brd 8D Lovely work btw
Lovely work btw
Sooo beautiful!!!
love it!
I really like what you did
Very poetic, in a slightly
This stunned me. Thank you
Thank you to Spyrre for bumping this...
... I'm not sure what to
But I want to say something.
I forget to look at my
I am satisfied with this, so I am very grateful each of you took the time to read it and offer your kind response.
I don't strive to be the best, but instead I strive to do my best, and always give it my all every time.
-faunet
I'm glad this was brought
Really fascinating style, and... wow. I feel so mindblown. This creates such a beautifully disturbing mental image.
"When the stag bellowed, the
"offering up the world to a forest made of ivory branches, dreaming of a stag."
My two favorite lines. That last one is powerful.
I really like this. It's simple yet very lovely.
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Do you mind me saving this on my computer so I don't lose it? (:
Please go ahead Ocean. Thank
Shaku, the style is heavily influenced by a poet named Zachary Schomburg. I highly recommend his writing.
I don't strive to be the best, but instead I strive to do my best, and always give it my all every time.
-faunet