In the beginning [a forest fable]

eyestrain's picture
1. In the beginning, there was nothing but a stag, dreaming of a river.

2. Beside that river grew a red flower. The flower dropped seeds and a great ocean of poppies flooded the riverbanks.

3. The heavy pollen from the flowers woke the stag from his slumber. When he awoke, he stood in dark space, empty and blacker than a crow's feathers.

4. When the stag bellowed, the sound ripped a hole in the blackness and he stepped through the tear into his dream.

5. At the top of a mountain, his step knocked loose a boulder which rolled over the river, and, sent flying, landed with a crash that cracked it in half.

6. The flowers ate the stone, and the stone looked like four hands offering up the world.

7. The stag ate the flowers and the black centers of the poppies looked like a crow's feathers.

8. The crows ate the stag.

9. The stag looked like a forest made of ivory branches.

10. By the river, there were nothing but poppies and two stones with four hands offering up the world to a forest made of ivory branches, dreaming of a stag.




I have been reading Zachary Schomburg's "The Man Suit" and wanted to try using a numbered list, as well
quadraptor's picture

I totally love this, the

I totally love this, the style is really cool too.

Also... what was your deer's name again? >.< Just need to know for the index page, but I looked all over and couldn't find it.
z.m123's picture

It's brd 8D Lovely work btw

It's brd 8D
Lovely work btw
eternal_dream's picture

Sooo beautiful!!!

Sooo beautiful!!! <333
love it!

I really like what you did

I really like what you did with this idea<3

Spyrre's picture

Very poetic, in a slightly

Very poetic, in a slightly morbid way. Lovely. <3

This stunned me. Thank you

This stunned me.
Thank you to Spyrre for bumping this...
Serenai's picture

... I'm not sure what to

... I'm not sure what to say.
But I want to say something.
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eyestrain's picture

I forget to look at my

I forget to look at my entries sometimes.
I am satisfied with this, so I am very grateful each of you took the time to read it and offer your kind response.

I don't strive to be the best, but instead I strive to do my best, and always give it my all every time.
-faunet
shaku's picture

I'm glad this was brought

I'm glad this was brought back up again. I apparently missed it the first time around~
Really fascinating style, and... wow. I feel so mindblown. This creates such a beautifully disturbing mental image.

ocean's picture

"When the stag bellowed, the

"When the stag bellowed, the sound ripped a hole in the blackness and he stepped through the tear into his dream."
"offering up the world to a forest made of ivory branches, dreaming of a stag."

My two favorite lines. That last one is powerful.
I really like this. It's simple yet very lovely.
-bookmarks-
Do you mind me saving this on my computer so I don't lose it? (:
eyestrain's picture

Please go ahead Ocean. Thank

Please go ahead Ocean. Thank you very much.

Shaku, the style is heavily influenced by a poet named Zachary Schomburg. I highly recommend his writing.

I don't strive to be the best, but instead I strive to do my best, and always give it my all every time.
-faunet