Unbeatable (Rihame poem)

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Writing for Rihame for drawing Quad as a wolf. Enjoy Eye

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I feel the pulse deep within the ground
A battle will soon rage, I can feel it
Antlers clashing endlessly from within
I crave it, every moment, every experience
The point where my eyes lock with my enemy's
The tension I feel before the battle
Studying his body, eager to rip it to shreds
Waiting for one of us to make the first move
Him...or me?

I spring first, antlers drawn, heart racing
He doesn't expect it, he doesn't move fast enough
I catch him off guard, my prongs digging deep into him
Oh how I love the sound of his suffering!
He loses his strength, the fire within him extinguished
I step back, studying him once more, savoring every moment
Do I finish him now, or let him suffer some more?
I approach, pressing my hoof into his open wound
His cries are like sweet music to my ears
"Pathetic, weak, disgrace to all stags...", I say
"You should have been born a doe."

And as the words of victory were spoken
I see the spectators around us
Their eyes filled with confusion, terror, and hate
Let it rage within them, let their anger flow
I have yet to find any others who could match me
I let my opponent live, I leave his side at that point
His blood staining my hoof much like a trophy
Let them come, let anyone oppose me
May the spectators see that I cannot be defeated
May the challengers fall to the unbeatable Rihame!
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Bumping for Rihame

Bumping for Rihame
Amazon's picture

"'You should have been born a

"'You should have been born a doe.'" Love it, haha. ♥

Anjali's picture

I like this! And I like that

I like this! And I like that line, too; I can almost hear him saying that.

One of my favorite phrases that you used is "antlers drawn"--like his antlers are swords, or bows pulled taut and ready to release their arrows. Very cool! ^^
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I thought that would be

I thought that would be something a stag would say to his defeated opponent, haha!

And yeah, that was the picture I had too about the antlers. Glad you got the same mental image Eye

Thanks guys
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srry for commenting so late.

srry for commenting so late. Haven't been on in a while. Anyways, I jus loved it!! it was so freakin awesomE! Who knew that yu had such a talent! I could read this over and over again! yu know, I was doin free art requests, you didn't have to write a story for me. I still lved it out of my mind though. so legendary8O
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Haha you're welcome, I wanted

Haha you're welcome, I wanted to give you and Pega something for doing the artwork before I made the request page anyway. Glad you like it, I had a lot of fun writing it and really love your character Eye
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Thank yu! I enjoyed creating

Thank yu! I enjoyed creating my character, and this poem really fits his personality according to his bio.