[ respiration's declination [ song-poem ] ... ]

February 5, 2011 - 5:51pm — Rutilus

You and me, love, we'd been
Treading water
Meant for slaughter, you said yourself

And then the day came, you were
Falling faster
And I asked her, where'd you go?

Then she told me you had
Gone and done it
Made a run for it
Got away

And as the months went on I was
Sinking lower
Winter's colder now you've left and escaped

Did you ever think that
Maybe after
We'd tear the rafters from the roof over our heads?

We could have been someone but
You were running
As I was yearning
You shut your eyes

The sickle and the scythe they
Hounded our lives
Oversized pocket knives
You learned to hate

We never met again, we
Seperated
Lives outdated
Was it too late?

Rotting tongues of wind they
Took your dust from me
Left my hands empty
By the sea

And as my sell-by-date
Reaches its maker
I beg you bring her

One time

Again to me

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February 5, 2011 - 6:21pm — MickKreiger

This is good. Less like some

This is good. Less like some of your other venty ones, that do remind me of that thing in english, where she goes to her boyfriend's door and a monster comes out of the floor, which just seemed random. This one has more power and depth. I like it a lot.

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--Mick--

February 5, 2011 - 6:30pm — Rutilus