[EDIT] Bumping because it fell off the front page in about four hours.
Sorry if I seem self centered, but I also had to fix a few typos that messed with the rhythm of the poem. Added a verse, too.
Met with hostile thoughts is attacker and her foe,
Staring at eachother unsure which way they may go.
You insist that you must follow as the two quickly part ways,
But can you hold your ground with his anger-driven gaze?
Quickly turning from you is the stag who you once saw,
Believed to be a calmer buck who's hatred he let thaw.
To ensue this clever contest of who can stop his reign,
Was it truly worth the turmoil and the everlasting pain?
It seemed that way as you tried much to carry-on,
Falling victim to insanity as his rational surely had gone.
A misplaced word and faltered step could lead you to his core,
But it seemed it locked itself away, unreachable as before.
What made him any different after the first few tries?
He greeted you with hosilities in your own surmise.
A group of others stood before the ever-fleeting stag,
He hadn't much to say for, no real need to even brag.
What occurred within mere minutes was to change his next few years,
Living with the ghost of one who's life was made of tears.
He ran soon after in escape, being quick upon his feet,
And yet you followed the injured deer upon his trick retreat.
You couldn't sway what rational he seemed to clutch,
Fought by anger and daring words, you decided you thought too much.
Met with troubled greetings again did stag and fawn,
Yet you managed to watch as their hostilies were widthdrawn.
A group approached the pair of deer defiant of their cues,
This meeting never happened, his existance they refused.
Again you chased the 'foe' with such eagerness to par,
With that of any younger deer who's strength wasn't to mar.
And by the playground did the tribe so tenderly destroy,
The deer who's skin was pierced by both their hatred and their joy.
You couldn't stand to watch what he was rewarded for his words,
That took place not long ago, witness of only you and birds.
You burst forth from you shell and with a charge and a roar,
"So help me luna, I cannot stand this bloodshed anymore!"
A clash of antlers met in a number of about three,
You slammed the sides of both the deer, determined to get them free.
The chase ensued not long after you foolishly interfered,
And so weakened by your heart your strength now disappeared.
Greeted by a stare did you see another in his chase,
But you couldn't stand another life to partake in such disgrace.
You heard of him before this, as his repuptation was,
He was stronger than any other and fought with little cause.
You knew that if the attacker and this older deer would meet,
It would surely end in his victory and the other's defeat.
You lowered your antlers calmly, thinking nothing of context,
Of who you really were up against in this whole horrendous mess.
He tossed his antlers in the air and charged without a thought,
Leaving you in shambles, wounded and distraught.
-speechless- O.O To pray
To pray is to believe, to believe is to purify one's soul
To pray is to believe, to believe is to purify one's soul
I actually can't believe
I think it may have been a misunderstanding, as earlier in the lagfest, there was a moment where Wu' lowered his antlers at Walter (Not sure if this was intended). It would have slipped by harmlessley but I think that the time after with them staring at each other just set the old man off..
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@Fenqua:
@Verdalas: Ah, well. xD; No, Wudiin did lower his antlers, on purpose too. I guess he was getting really desperate and was tired of everyone chasing Baal. *shrug* Wudiin tends to get himself into a lot of trouble when he's tired. xD;
Walter's still an awsome deer, though. O: He's been a favorite of mine ever since I first heard about him.
I am seriously having to cry
*dries tears*
Lightcreator
Aaah, well then, the fight
I rather like Wudiin myself. <3 Especially the song you placed with him. I could quite say that white stag is a favourite of mine as well.
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Just.. Too epic. I'd love to
--Stays a lonely Seele
Wow. Just wow. You have an
Your Wudiin just couldn't seem to avoid bad moments could he? Poor fellow.
Those screenshots, as I have said before, could almost tell your story without words. You have quite a skill for making an amazing shot. Makes me ponder how good you would be with a real camera.
This is so full of awesome, I really don't even know what to say. You are an amazing wordsmith.
Beautiful, captivating and
I love your way with words, it's so advanced and so beautiful. ^^
Meet Virgil
Meet Shakespeare
@Flyra: Eep! Now I feel bad,
I'm so glad, and flustered, by such kind words! Thank you so much! *digital hug*
....YOU'RE AMAZING. ;D
@Verdalas: Indeed. The lag was....irk. I just got a whole 'nother gig of ram to avoid it, too. Oye.
But at least everyone managed to connect to TEF in the first place, eh?
@Misako: I'm glad you enjoyed it! I don't do them that often because it tends to be a pain when one rhymes so much. And once you get into the rhythm, I have trouble stopping! Wud's getting some pine-cone ice cream today, does Polt want any? xD;
@Baal: Wow! Thank you so much! <3 It's alright, nothing personal, as I don't blame him for lashing out at a deer who was a little to constistant in his tracking of 'em. xD Wudiin tries his best to find the good in others, but once again, he tends to get himself in trouble.
Actually, I'm terrible with a camera, truly! Unfortunatly all the photography classes at my school deal with actual film, and digital just seems so much more convenient. Thank you so incredibly much, once again, for such lovely words! <3 <3 Baal is such an intriguing deer, I love writing about 'em.
@VCG: Thank you! I'm quite glad that you enjoyed reading it. I hope that I managed to convey what happened well, as it's kinda tough to explain while rhyming. Heh. Once more, thanks for such compliments! I hope Virgil feels better soon.
Oh my God! This is absolutly
Would it be ok if I linked it to the fawn's page so it may not easily be lost again? (that and it's way too pretty no to put up there.) XD
I can't believe this got pushed off so fast! I didn't even get to see it. -surprise surprise-
*hugs back* <3 NO, YOU ARE.
NO, YOU ARE. x"D
Lightcreator
Just beautiful. *-*
I love this. Like Baal said,
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I'm a little wolf inside a girl.
Lightbringer-apprentice to Yorres