the journey contiues...
December 3, 2013 - 11:32pm — Hadou
so i was suppose to post this yesterday since it was hadou's first TEF birthday but i decided not too, and now i am because i asked if i should and a few people said i should, so here it is, all big and stuff.
"like if it sucks please tell me, like don't have me showing it to everyone being all "Yeah it's great like best drawing yet," when it's not. That's embarrassing. so should I post it, hmm?"
"my biggest issue is i want more critique rather than fluffy uplifting compliments . honestly i'd rather get things more like 'hmm, i dont like this or that' it makes me try harder the next time."
that's why i didn't post it. but i did. ok.
so gimme some critique and stuff, yeah.
This is just a tracking
edit: Ugh I am sorry Hadou but it is getting late and I haven't gotten a chance to do this. I'm gonna give this another look tomorrow morning when I'm fresh-eyed and give you some critique then.
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thank you~ tera you always
tera you always give the best critiques, i shall wait for it ;u;
What can I say. -hoof on the
-hoof on the front foot is too long
-like patterns on the body
-shadow on the ground too much, I think. I do not understand in the shadows, just my opinion
Thank you! I agree the hooves
Alright, sorry for the delay
Hadou's face blends into the central swath of dark grey you've put in the background. This is making the shape of his face hard to see, and this is bad because faces are something people always focus on. Ways to avoid this would be lightening the area behind the face, or repositioning him so his face would be over a lighter part of the background. Alternatively, since this is a rather surreal image, you could try outlining the face lightly (maybe in red or light grey). All of these options will help give you contrast between Hadou and the background. I've included an illustration of what I mean in the image below.
The area of shadow under Hadou also needs a bit of attention to make sure it reads as his shadow and not a darker area of ground. The main issue is that this image doesn't have a set light source. Choosing a light source is necesarry for any image that includes shadows. To give you an idea of how choosing a light source works and could be used to change the atmosphere of your image, I've roughed up a version of your drawing to illustrate what I mean (I hope you don't mind!).
When I paint, I doodle an obnoxious yellow sun/light bulb like this one. The rays of light, indicate all the directions light is coming from, radiating out form that light source. This helps me tell which areas of my image will be lit, and which areas will be dark. Any area that has something between the light source and the ground, will produce a cast shadow. In this case, Hadou's shadow is on an angle that matches the direction of the light source. You can put a light source anywhere you want in an image, but as soon as you move your light source, all the shadows in an image will change too. Different types of light also produce different looking shadows (harsh strong light, like a table lamp, produce sharp-edged shadows where as sunlight and other soft types of light, will produce soft-edged shadows).
I hope those pointers will be useful to you in the future, if you need clarification on anything let me know I'm happy to help. I look forward to seeing more paintings from you in the future!
edit: UGH just saw your comment about not meaning for the dark area to be a shadow...woops. I'll leave the critique above because it could still be useful in another piece. I think people are going to read any dark area under an object as a shadow, so if you want to paint him without a shadow, make sure the area underneath him is the same as the rest of the 'ground' part of the picture.
Tera actually won this topic
But what I can say - as first you should work harder with your backgrounds as this outline is a beggining of a good style. There is something with his back left leg, maybe if his knee was a bit higher it would look better. I also think you was drawing a lot from the last time you've posted a picture here, that I've seen, cause I see progress. I would like to see more.
gaaaaaaah thank you so much
i'll definitely try using those lighting tips for my next painting, it was extremely helpful!
and dampir oh yes i see the joint placement, and whatnot of the left leg are a bit off from what the right leg has.
eh, yes and no i just usually never finish anything so i don't post it, but i have done a little bit of practice with it. i'm working on something else now, so i'll post it when it's finished .3.
No problem, glad I could
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