final analysis | (important note)

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((if you have no idea about the losing game, read here ))




"Still... still able to talk, lieutnant...?

He... he he he...

...b... barely...

This... this was the final round, yes?
This ...this is the end now, yes...?
Yes it is."




He lay on the ground where he had broken down.




The rain fell down on his smashed and torn body... it was cold... too cold....
... why was it so cold?
This was not only because of the rain... he knew that.



His heart was beating... fast... foo fast.
The blood ran down from the deep cut on his throat.... too much blood.
It mixed up with the rainwater on the ground.




"S...so what happened...s...soldier..eh?"




He cought. More blood.
He giggled.
He smiled.




"Nothing.... he he nothing... special.

...we...we have.. a loser... it seems... he... he hehee..

The... the game has... has a loser..."




His breath went faster now.
He felt like he couldn't breath anymore.... that was the shock from the blood loss.



Fast hearbeat, fast breath...
...slow thoughts.



The rain washed the blood away... but it didn't stop the bleeding.



It was hard to think...
He was tired... why was he so tired...?




"D...do you...re..regret it...s..soldier...th...this game...yes?"




He started to laugh, loud, fast...
His laughter echoed from the trees around him.
Drowned the whispers of the rain.




"FUCK NO!

Was... was... he he... the.. the best thing... could.. happen... yes..?"




...the laughter died into a weak giggle.
He grinned.




"N..never...never thought.... you'll... have... have the guts...Jergens...

He he... bravo... br...avo...


Well...done. You...you...f..inally followed me... that far
You... you ... make me proud..."




Fast breath, fast heartbeat... the blood was still running.
His body was not able to fight this. Though.. it tried... he could feel it... he could feel his body fighting.
He wasn't fighting.
...too tired.




"S... so the...

So the gambler lost... yes...?

The gambler lost what he did not have...
The gambler lost what he did not have, he, he, he!

Do... do they know that....yes?

D...don't think so... he he...
E..else...they wouldn't... they hadn't..."




Ha had to close his eyes now.
Unable to keep them open.
There.. was not much time left now.
He could hear the rain falling down.
His heartbeat weaken.



He could feel his time running out fast... as fast as the blood running down from his throat.



"J... Jane... my... my love...
My... my angel...

he he... di... didn't make it to... to you... I... I am sorry.

B..but maybe... hehe better...you... you would just..."




Rain...

... he.. he only cries in rain.
..without the rain... he is unable to cry.
He can't cry anymore.
...unable to shed those tears thet have to be shed...

He smiled, turned his face up to heaven.
He felt the raindrops on his face, running down... like tears... mixing up with dirt and blood...




"He he...

Don't cry...don't cry for me... my.... my love, yes?
You... cry too much anyways...


J...just remember...
...I will keep my promise.


Hear me...?


I love you...
...and I will keep my promise, Jane!"




With his last thought, he kissed her goodbye in his mind.

With his last heartbeat the bleeding stopped.

With his last breath the glowing symbol above his head vanished.




Silence.
A dead body on the ground.




No giggle, no smile.
... the look on his face... he looked satisfied.

Peaceful.
Finally... peaceful.





Slowly... the white of his fur started to fade... turned light brown.

The shaggy , long tail shortened...

The goggles on his head, his earrings, the piearcings on his eyebrow started to rust, fell to the ground, turned to dust...

The skin on his face...seemed to melt.. the scars smoothed out...





... every feature, every sign of the person, who called himself 'Jack' vanished from this place.




All whats left, was the dead body of a nameless stag, curled up on the ground.

Slowly the rain started to wash away the last signs of his blood.





London after Midnight - Heaven now


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ShadowsofLight's picture

beautiful...and moving. A

beautiful...and moving.

A fitting end.

I am thankful to have seen both his TEF incarnations.

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My.

My. God.

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That was so freaking intense...and..

I would feel sorry for Jack, but that's not how you would want it, all I'll say is for him to rest in peace. Your writing is fabulous, and I can't wait to see what happens to Jane.

&hearts

...wait, what? Did he... die?

...wait, what? Did he... die? For real?
Amazon's picture

&hearts;...

♥...


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His heart stopped beating, he

His heart stopped beating, he stopped breathing...

... he died.
GingerNut's picture

Your protrayal of this... I'm

Your protrayal of this... I'm sobbing now. I'm seriously, utterly sobbing...
Thank you, Alice...
Thank you
Munkel's picture

I'm glad he found his peace

I'm glad he found his peace ♥ because... he seemed sad all the time through.
And I'm glad I got to know him, he was one of the most awesome characters here.

It is very beautiful, and

It is very beautiful, and just gaveme a spark of inspiration that I needed...

After rereading it over and over, I'm tearing up with you, Ginger. ;')
Flyleaf's picture

Awesome writing !! Tough i

Awesome writing !! Tough i feel a little bit sad that Jack died Sad
I hope he finds peace now Exclaim
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Thank you guse. I bet you

Thank you guse.

I bet you can't imagine how hard and exhausting this was.


(well okay... ginger you can xD)


btw... this is not done now... but i wait with posting for a bit now <3

Not done? He he, I can

Not done?

He he, I can hardly wait. :3
Pegasicorn's picture

Whoa... Just whoa... I never

Whoa...
Just whoa...

I never would've thought of them returning to being a nameless when they die. But it's really fitting.
gone's picture

O-...oh. This was so

O-...oh.

This was so beautifully written, you can almost see it in your mind.

I hope he finds peace.

Just awesome, beautify

Just awesome, beautify written.*does not even have proper words*
That ending was also very unique and interesting

Wow, I honestly didn't

Wow, I honestly didn't believed it would end that way. D:
Intense, as always. <3

thanks a lot guys, really

thanks a lot guys, really &hearts

Tuhka's picture

Augh, feels horrible seeing

Augh, feels horrible seeing him die... D'8
This writing, it's really striking. The way you write, it's just... sfkhsd damn.

This was so intense to read.

This was so intense to read. I couldn't stop my tears from falling. <3
Ammy's picture

;_;

;_;

thank you as well

thank you as well <3


i am really glad i moved you a bit |D
(though i really wonder how one can cry about him xD)